Friday Reads: THE CONSPIRACY OF US by Maggie Hall

My resolution for 2015 is all about organization. That means introducing new blog series, switching some style guides, and improving reader experience! You’ll notice that “Write Lara Write” is now “Write, Edit, Repeat.” Same URL to keep things simple (writelarawrite.wordpress.com), but a new name, since this blog is about the crafts of writing and editing, not my personal writing site (which is coming…eventually).

And since it’s not just me anymore, I’m opening the blog up for guest posts! Apply here.

Friday Reads is a new series on Write, Edit, Repeat. I’ll only be blogging about my favorites (no room for negativity here), and I’ll end with a writing prompt. Be sure to subscribe if you haven’t already, and then you won’t miss out. Adult fiction, YA fiction, MG, graphic novels, picture books—I’ll cycle through them all, sometimes posting monthly, sometimes weekly.

For the archive of Friday Reads posts, visit bit.ly/LaraReads.

Today I’m reviewing The Conspiracy of Us, a YA romantic thriller by Maggie Hall, and one of the most highly anticipated YA reads of 2015.

First Impressions

First Impressions walks through my method of judging books by their title, cover, and cover copy before I pick up a book.

The Title

“The Conspiracy of Us” is a strange, yet evocative title (I’ll be using the word “evocative” a lot when talking about covers and titles—sorry/not sorry). The word “conspiracy” suggests the thriller genre akin to The Da Vinci Code; “us” suggests romance or a close relationship. Since this is a romantic thriller, the title is extremely effective with its word choice.

The Cover

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If you couldn’t tell this was a thriller from the word “conspiracy,” you’ll get the worldwide-thriller vibe from the cover. The city overlays, the compass—travel. The skewed phantom text shadowing the title implies mystery or possibly some chase scenes.

And we’ve got the subject, a teen girl in a gorgeous ball gown. Intrigue! Mystery! Travel!

Then you look at the tagline: “An ancient puzzle. A trail of clues. An unwanted destiny.”

So basically a teen girl is part Chosen One, part Indiana Jones. If there’s remotely a connection to Indiana Jones or Han Solo, I am so there.

The Blurb

Instead of breaking down the blurb like I did with After I Do and Maybe in Another Life, we’re going to do the 69 test instead, because it was such a great representation of the book, that’s what the publisher put on the back cover:

Elisa led me to a three-way mirror, where a girl who hardly looked like me stared back in triplicate. In the silver gown, the girl looked more serious, more elegant, then they changed me into the gold dress again, and she was glamorous, striking.

I found myself hoping fiercely that my mom would let me stay for the ball, and even a little longer. Meet the Saxons, find out more about my father’s family and the rest of the Circle. To feel like I belonged in this strange, fascinating world.

“You have to choose eventually.” Elisa smiled. In the mirror, the gold sequins shimmered. But there was something about the silver. It belonged on me.

Aimee unzipped the gold dress and left me to get out of it, following Elisa downstairs to wrap the silver one. I watched it go. I couldn’t believe that, just like that, it was going to be mine.

I was about step out of the gold dress when I heard footsteps coming up the stairs. “Elisa?” I said. “Aimee?” There was no answer.

In case it was one of the men come to escort me down, I zipped the dress up.

The girls were nowhere in sight, but the man who had let us in stood at the top of the staircase.

“Sorry, I’m not ready yet,” I said. I smiled at him, and he reached into his jacket pocket.

He pulled out something that, for a moment, didn’t register. It was too discordant with the marble floors, the dresses, the Bach chiming from the speakers.

It was a knife.

Read more about Maggie’s 69 Test here. And participate in #70Pit in July to share your page 69 or 70 and possibly win edits or get agent requests!

Reading

This was a fun novel to read. If you go in expecting the prophecy and Chosen One tropes (they’re implied right there on the cover), then you probably won’t expect this to be something that it’s not. What it is, is fun. And there really are similarities to Indiana Jones and the Last Crusade, with the Chosen One storyline like The Mummy Returns. Like those movies, there’s slow building romance (yes, please), plenty of sexual tension (all PG-13), some melodrama in parts, chase scenes, murderous bad guys, kinda murderous good guys, and adventure.

Those movies are called popcorn flicks. Not quite sure what the book equivalent is called, but keep your arms inside the vehicle and enjoy the ride.

Recommendations

If you like The Conspiracy of Us, you might like books by Ally Carter.

Writing Prompt

The main character, Avery West, is destined to be important, but she resists her destiny. Write about either 1) a time you were anxious about an outcome you knew was coming but had no power over, or 2) a time you rejected someone else’s plan for you.

Query #10 March 2015

Below is the tenth public query critique I’m offering up on the blog. To enter, see the rules here. If you want a guaranteed critique (plus line edit) of your query or synopsis, private ones cost $35 each.

My comments are in blue below. To read the original query first, simply read only the black text.

Dear Agent:

Aristocrat Tanner Mills, in theory, knew not to trust anyone his parents haven’t you switch to present tense here, then switch back. extensively vetted. In theory, he should have been in school instead of the bar close to the docks How old is Tanner? Is he a schoolboy, a Yale man?You never give his age or the age category of this novel—please do…and then quickly finds himself I’m not a fanof “finds himself,” because it’s a passive cliche. If you want to use passive tense to show that he’s a victim, then you can cut the wordiness and say “is tied,” etc. tied, gagged, and bound if you want to use the bound and gagged trope, that’s fine. I love tropes! But “bound” and “tied” are redundant here. on an airship where the city of London is nothing more than a distance dot wrapped in cloud cover. I’ll be honest, the first time I skimmed this, I completely missed the “air” part and the “cloud cover” part. Since this is steampunk, and setting is muy importante in steampunk, I’d like that up front. Start with what makes your book unique, not with a trope.

I’d recommend starting with a personalization, then leading into your genre paragraph, then starting immediately with the hook (the shanghaiing of the aristocrat, not the disobedience of the aristocrat). It might look like this: Continue reading

April–July Pitching Opportunities 2015

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This page will be updated as I find contests without entrance fees taking place April–July 2015. This will also be my last seasonal roundup, since I’ve found other contest lists which are updated regularly: Carissa Taylor’s list of contests, updated each year; the contests hosted by Adventures in YA Publishing, open for MG–NA manuscripts; KIDLIT 411’s contests for writers and illustrators of children’s literature; and Sub It Club’s Contest Roundups.

April–July Pitching Opportunities:

  • Nest Pitch (April 1)
  • PitchSlam (April 3)
  • Query Kombat (May 22)
  • PitMad (June 4)
  • SFFpit (June 18)
  • Pitch to Publication (June 29)
  • 70pit (July 1)

Know of any others? Comment below!

Nest Pitch

For: MG-Adult

Submission Date: April 1st

Submission Package: 35-word pitch, Easter Egg question, first 300 words (see blog for specifics)

Entries: More details will be released March 23rd/24th on the Nest Pitch blog.

Winners: 40 will be chosen and mentored.

Twitter: Cheer each other on using the #NestPitch2015 hashtag.

PitchSlam

For: MG-Adult

Submission Date: April 3rd

Submission Package: 35-word pitch, first 250 words (see blog for specifics)

Entries: Unlimited within submission window

Winners: Slush readers provide feedback on the 35-word pitch (round one) and the first 250 (round two). In round three, anyone can enter, and the hosts each pick 8 entries for an agent round.

Twitter: Cheer each other on using the #PitchSlam hashtag.

Query Kombat

For: MG, YA, NA, and Adult genres, excluding erotica

Submission Date: May 22nd

Submission Package: query, first 250 words (see blog for specifics)

Entries: 200

Winners: 64 entries will be chosen to compete, bracket-style. Final four are reviewed by agents.

Twitter: Root for your favorite entries using the #QueryKombat hashtag.

#PitMad Twitter Contest

For: PB, MG, YA, NA, A

Submission Date: June 4

Submission Package: Variety of Twitter Pitches (see my guide here)

Entries: unlimited during submission window

Winners: A “favorite” from a legitimate agent or publisher is a request to query. Each agent participating will give specific instructions for submitting requested material.

Twitter: Pitch party open to all complete manuscripts

#SFFpit

For: PB, MG, YA, NA, A

Submission Date: June 18th

Submission Package: Variety of Twitter Pitches (see my guide here) including sub-genre (see that guide here)

Entries: unlimited during submission window

Winners: A “favorite” from a legitimate agent or publisher is a request to query. Each agent participating will give specific instructions for submitting requested material.

Twitter: Tweet your pitch in 140 characters or fewer on Twitter, during the submission window. Use hashtag #SFFpit and include sub-genre and age (see blog for more info).

#Pitch to Publication

For: MG–A

Submission Date: June 29th–July 3rd

Submission Package: Query, first 5 pages, personality questionnaire, 5 choices of freelance editors

Entries: unlimited during submission window

Winners: Each writer will submit to 5 freelance editors. Each editor (including me!) will choose one manuscript to critique. After the editor critiques the manuscript, it will be submitted for the agent round. Agents can reject or offer representation upon requesting full, critiqued and revised manuscripts. After the agent round, the writer has the option to participate in a small press round, in which publishers can make requests.

Twitter: Cheer each other on or ask questions using #PitchToPublication

#70pit

For: PB, MG, YA, NA, A

Submission Date: July 1st

Submission Package: code name, novel’s intended audience, 7-word character description, 70th page (see blog for more info)

Entries: unlimited

Winners: Top 7 entries from each audience category will be featured HERE, on Write Edit Repeat, for agent perusal. More hosts are possible, and I’m sure there will be giveaways. Contact me if you’d like to be a slush reader!

Twitter: We’ll have a week-long party from July 1st–7th using #70pit.