Meet my Main Character

Welcome to the Meet My Main Character Blog Tour, started by Debra Brown. I was invited by Kristin Molnar. I met Kristin via a Craigslist classified for a writer’s group. Answering that ad was perhaps the most daring thing I’ve ever done socially (I’m very introverted), and I’m so very glad I did. Meet Silas, Kristin’s MC, here.

I’m bringing in Robin McGinnis for this blog tour. He’s the protagonist of my literary fantasy, WORLD SONG.

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What is the name of your character? Is he/she fictional or historical? 

Robin Evans is fictional, but some historical characters make appearances later on. Geoffrey of Monmouth, Henry II, Rosamund Clifford. Gutenberg is a friend of a friend.

When and where is the story set? 

  • St. Bernadine, Minnesota (based roughly on Cloquet) in 2009
  • Eirinon, a fantasy realm located in the Welsh/English Forest of Dean in 1176

What should we know about her/him? 

Finally, an excuse to throw in some backstory! Here’s an info dump I cut from an early query letter draft:

Ever since his dad disappeared (what kind of historian goes MIA, anyway?), 26-year-old Robin has been stunted in two ways. One, he wants to be the family hero, to the point of picking Lycra wedgies on his lunch break. Two, besides his party bookings as a Batman impersonator, his calendar and plan for the future are blank. He knows that, eventually, one of his family members will need his help. And when that day comes, he won’t let them down.

He’s a nerdy, cellist, wannabe hero. No matter how many hours he clocks in at the gym, he’s still long and lean, but he’s stronger than he looks.

His last name used to be McGinnis, but McGinnis is the last name of Terry McGinnis, who succeeds Bruce Wayne as Batman. Robin (no relation to the boy wonder) is a big fan of Batman, so it just got too weird. Now he’s Robin Evans.

Weird fact: Though he’s been a character of mine for seven years now, I never really liked Robin. He was too responsible. Too heroic. I had to get him into a fight and give him some weird quirks before I started liking him. He’s not based on Chuck Bartowski (GIF above), but I adore Chuck, so I borrowed a couple of his traits and tested them out on Robin until I really liked him. I knew if I didn’t like my protagonist, my readers probably wouldn’t, either!

What is the main conflict? What messes up his/her life? 

Robin and his brother and sister get transported to the Middle Ages a few days before their mom’s birthday. He wants to get them home as soon as possible—his mom already lost her husband, so Robin feels guilty for their disappearance, even though it wasn’t really his fault. But he doesn’t know how to get back, and then his sister is kidnapped, and his brother is sentenced to be executed… Let’s just say Robin has his work cut out for him.

What is the personal goal of the character?

Robin has a bit of a savior complex. He wants to fix everything for everybody. At best, it’s mildly annoying. At worst, it borders on obsessive behavior and illuminates some psychological issues. In terms of Robin’s personal goals, the story is a tragedy. Robin can’t save everyone. But the rest of the story is more of a comedy of errors. So together I guess that makes it a dramedy.

Is there a working title for this novel, and can we read more about it?

The working title is WORLD SONG, and it’s not ready yet for its debut. Though I do need Beta Readers! Contact me here or on Twitter (@larathelark). If/when I land an agent, I’ll post my query letter here on my blog.

When can we expect the book to be published?

I’m still writing! I have an August 2014 end date, but I’ll be editing for quite some time, and I’ll be querying Winter 2014 at the earliest. Since I’m going the traditional publishing route, I hope for a book deal in 2015, with a release in 2016 or 2017. It all depends on the market!

Next week Kylie Betzner and Nate Philbrick will be continuing the tour. Kylie writes comedic fantasy novels and connects writers to readers and resources though her blog Lit Chic. Her first novel will be coming out January 2015. I “met” Nate online, and he’s very active on Twitter and his blog Flash Flood Fiction. He is a speculative fiction writer with published and contest-winning short stories. He’s writing a novel that is in progress to query.

Query #2 July 2014

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Below is the second public query critique I’m offering up on the blog. This will happen once a month (as long as I get a response). I choose one query at random per month. If your query is not selected one month, it will be in the drawing for the next month. Please do not resubmit unless you’ve made significant edits. To enter, see the rules here. If you want a guaranteed critique (plus line edit) of your query or synopsis, private ones cost $35 each.

Dear Lara,

Sending to me might be practice, but any initial email to someone in this business needs to be addressed “Dear Mr./Ms. [Last Name],” and if you are not sure on whether to use Mr. or Ms., look at their website and see which pronoun is used there. Some people say it’s okay to use Dear [First name Last name] if you aren’t sure of gender. I say do your research.

Melissa Stratten puked on a senior basketball player while hooking up, and nobody will stop whispering about it.  Even worse[,] her mom’s ex-boyfriend stole her college money.  Now she has to find a way to pay for college or else she’ll never get out of Valley Pines.

There’s an extra space after your first sentence. Yes, I notice these things. No, you won’t get in trouble for it. But I see a couple of other double spaces, too. Find and replace. Agents skim hundreds of queries each day. You don’t want to include any annoyances if you can help it. Using “even worse” is another one of those annoyances I just saw an agent tweet about today, actually. (Update: I can’t seem to find that tweet ANYWHERE, even using the search function. Keep it if you want, but use a comma if you do!)

That aside, how old is Melissa? Is she a junior? If she’s a senior, then why mention that her hook-up was a senior?

So these things happened to Melissa. What I want to know is how she feels about it. Is she angry? Secretly upset but trying to play cool?

When her best friend Jack, the school drug dealer, suggests they create an app based on school scandals, an ostracized Melissa is all for exacting revenge on her classmates. Chaos, anonymously unveils the hottest dirt to everyone at school, gives Melissa a way to make some cash, and shows off her design skills to colleges.  It’s epic. 

“Epic” is one of the most overused words in the English language. I’d like to see voice in a YA query, but done seamlessly, not tacked to the end. How does this make Melissa cash? Is the information unveiled only to paid subscribers? Or do people have to pay to submit the dirt?

Commas don’t follow titles. It’s not clear on first glance that “Chaos” is the title. Be clear. Also, the app isn’t anonymously doing anything, it’s the users that are anonymously posting. Try something like “Students are eager to purchase the app, Chaos, which lets users upload dirt on their classmates anonymously.” It’s not great, but at least it’s clear.

Then Melissa finds out Jack wants to use Chaos to release a sex tape of a student and a teacher, a teacher who knows about his dealing. If Melissa doesn’t go along with Jack, she can spare a girl’s reputation–like she wishes someone spared hers.

So the teacher knows about Jack’s dealing? Is the teacher also threatening to get Jack expelled? Why doesn’t Jack just blackmail the teacher? This makes no sense to me.

But, tThe more Melissa pushes Jack to kill Chaos, the more paranoid and threatening he becomes, pinning the entire app, and the video[,] on her. Melissa has to stop Jack before she ends up expelled, in jail, and kissing her college dreams goodbye.

Why is Jack getting paranoid? Why won’t he just kill it? If he has already pinned it on her, how can she stop him? And why would she be put in jail?

BOOK TITLE, no comma after the title is a 60,000 word YA contemporary novel.  It will appeal to fans of ABC’s Revenge and The Social Network.   Thank you for your consideration.

Most agents are fine with TV or movie comp titles, but some might consider it bad taste to compare books only to television shows. It has subtext that says “My book will get even people who watch TV to read.” Consider adding a book as a comparative title too.

While the premise is interesting, it’s a Veronica Mars episode. If you want to compete with a cult classic, you’ll have to show me what makes this story different, and show me that Melissa is a Veronica Mars for the next generation, interesting enough for me to pick up a book instead of watching reruns.

Sincerely,

[redacted]

Sent from my iPhone

I have too many questions and this had enough minor annoyances to add up to one major annoyance—that this doesn’t seem professional. As soon as I opened this email, this is what I saw:
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It tells me that I’m at least the fourth person to read this query. The signature was “Sent from my iPhone.”

Be professional, be clear. Make the agent want to read your book, and make him or her want to work with you.

Author Chats: Interview with Katrina Leno

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Katrina Leno’s debut novel, The Half Life of Molly Pierce, is coming out July 8th! Order it at The Book Depository, Barnes and Noble, or Amazon.

Hi Katrina, thanks for agreeing to do this interview! Most of my readers are unpublished authors, and I’m sure they’d love to hear your journey as a writer, especially through drafting, editing, and submitting. First, how did you deal with rejection?

I’ve heard so many horror stories about the publishing industry, about people trying to get books sold for years and years… But I have to say, I had the most positive, encouraging experience from the very beginning. Even my rejection letters were kind and honest and said things like “We JUST bought a book like this, otherwise we would scoop this up!” or “You are so talented and your book is great; it just isn’t right for our list for the following reasons.” I think as far as rejection goes, you just have to really understand that there are BILLIONS of people in the world. Not all of them are going to respond to your book. And that’s really okay. Read your rejection letters, though. Try and glean some wisdom. These are really smart, intelligent professionals who have taken the time to read your work. Why don’t they want to buy it / represent you? Is there something you can do better or differently next time? Use your rejection letters as a tool for your own improvement. Find the positive. And then mooooove on.

Great advice. So how did you find your agent?

I actually queried a very small handful of agents, because I get overwhelmed easily and didn’t want to put myself in a weird position—querying fifty agents and then getting them all mixed up or something. I sat down with Writer’s Market and a pad of paper and took notes on everyone that immediately stood out to me. Then I did research on their current client list and what sort of books they represented. In the end I queried a very small group of agents. I received two offers for representation, and one request for a rewrite and resubmission. I spoke to the three agents on the phone and made my decision based on how our conversations went. I am OVERJOYED with my agent. She is truly a gem. So, the takeaway here: take your time, do your research, make sure you’re querying agents that make sense for your book, and make sure you’re sending them EXACTLY what they’ve requested (the quickest way to get your query chucked into the slush pile? Sending them twenty pages of writing when they’ve only asked for ten. Seriously. Follow instructions!). It took me about two months from when I started querying until I found my agent. 

Next step: My agent then queried a small handful of publishing houses, and one by one they all said no. BUT, they all said no in the thoughtful ways I mentioned above. So the rejections really didn’t bother me, because they all made sense. I chose to look at it as a learning experience. It’s all about perspective! I could just as easily have taken to bed and spent weeks sulking as each new “no” came in. 

A good perspective to have! (I’ll try to remember that the next time I reach for the ice cream.) What was your reaction when you heard about your deal with HarperCollins?

When I finally got that “yes” from HarperCollins… My agent emailed and asked if she could call me. I was alone in the house. I took her phone call in the kitchen and as she talked, I sat on the floor. I didn’t move for ten minutes afterward. My body was in complete shock. It was the best feeling, but completely overwhelming. I’d spent so long coaching myself not to get bummed out about the rejections that I was wholly unprepared for the “yes.” But—unprepared in the best way possible. 

You mentioned on Twitter that you quit your job. What was your day job, and what are you working on now?

Oh man, I just quit my job! Every time I think about that, I feel SO HAPPY. It was the best decision. I was working as a retail manager in a really negative, caustic environment and it was stifling any sort of creative energy I was trying to access. I am EXTREMELY lucky that I am able to take a couple months off in order to re-center myself and, hopefully, write another book. Right now I’m working on a novel that’s been brewing for a number of years and has taken many different forms during that time. Maybe it goes without saying, but I LOVE writing, and I am happy it’s all I have to focus on right now. I am the best version of myself when I am maintaining a word-count-based writing schedule. (Currently: 5K words a day. This is lofty, and I don’t beat myself up if I don’t quite get there, but I damn well make a huge effort to do so.)

Five thousand words every day? Nice! How long did it take you to write The Half Life of Molly Pierce? 

My first draft of HALF LIFE took me three weeks to write. I was kind of like an author possessed. I truly worked some eight- and ten-hour days, pausing only to get lunch or refill my coffee. I was just so READY to write this novel. It burst out of me fully formed, the most cathartic experience I could have hoped for. 

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Any idea how many revisions you went through? Any darlings you had to murder?

My editor, agent, and I went through, I think, four revisions? But there was never a massive overhaul, no huge rewrite. It was mostly little things, like changing a few names and reversing the last two scenes the book. I didn’t have to murder any darlings for this one! My second book, though … That’s been another story! 

How long have you been writing? 

I started writing and reading a lot when I was in grade school. When I was twelve or thirteen I asked my mom how novels are made. I was in this heavy Stephen King phase at the time, and I’d just had this earth-shattering revelation that Stephen King was a grown-up person, and he had written these novels and given them to the library (I was fuzzy on the process). I wanted to do that, too. My mom gave me TERRIBLE advice (sometimes moms are fuzzy on the process, too … she told me that there were computer programs that wrote books, now. She doesn’t remember saying this) but I was smart enough not to listen to her. I wrote my first novel about an alien entity that could jump from one body to the next, taking over consciousness for a period of time before moving on. It was called JUMPER, and it was truly horrible. But it marked the start of a journey. And I hope each thing I’ve written has gotten slightly less horrible.

I’m sure all of your characters are your brain children, but if you had to pick a favorite, who might it be?

For HALF LIFE, I really liked writing Lyle because he was so different from anyone that Molly, my MC, has so far encountered in her life. She’s surrounded by positive, supportive people, and then you have Lyle—who’s selfish, egotistical and incredibly immature. It was a challenge to make him so flawed without making the reader hate him. I mean, I want people to care that he dies (not a spoiler! He dies in the first chapter) and I want people to feel sorry for him—that he’s never able to grow up. He’s a good guy, really. He just hasn’t realized that yet. 

You have a gorgeous blog combining two of my favorite things—words and pictures. Can you share a picture of your favorite place to write?

Ohhh, thank you! My blog is so personal, I’m surprised whenever someone actually likes it. Sometimes I think I should make it more about writing or my books, but it always feels a little disingenuous when I put that sort of stuff up there. I’m not sure why! I’m trying to get over that. As far as my favorite place to write… This is where I used to write when I lived in New York. I had a studio apartment in Crown Heights in Brooklyn with these three gorgeous windows. I spent hours and hours in that grey armchair, and it was where I eventually wrote the majority of HALF LIFE (although the chair and I weren’t in Brooklyn anymore, we had moved to Connecticut). I love that chair. 

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photo credit: Amanda Jane Shank

If you could have any superhero power, what would it be?

The ability to freeze time. It’s moving much too quickly. 

Which Hogwarts house would you be sorted into?

I think Ravenclaw, because I’m not overly adventurous and I like learning new things. And I read too much to be in Gryffindor. I don’t have time for rescuing people from giant snakes. 

Ha! Favorite Billy Joel song. Go.

To Make You Feel My Love, which was actually written by Bob Dylan but first released by Billy Joel. This has been my favorite love song since I heard Garth Brooks’ version when I was a very young, sentimental kid. I think there’s something pretty magical about unironic love songs. 

Do you have a top 3 list of books or authors, or a recommended reading list?

How about this: if I could somehow smash together the writing of Gabriel Garciá Márquez, Donald Barthelme, and Vincent Van Gogh, the ensuing novel would be the exact thing I want to write. Someday I will get there. 

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Are you an author that has been (or will soon be) traditionally published? I’d love to interview you and turn you into your own adorable 8-bit sprite! Contact me on Twitter or e-mail me: lara willard at icloud dot com.